Outline: THINKING ABOUT HAPPY LIFE
* Thesis statement: Happy life is that you can live with what you want.
* Paragraph 1:
Topic sentence: Thinking about the difference between the rich and the poor
Controlling: * The rich:
- It’s said that: only the rich have a happy life but it not true
- Many rich people aren’t happy with their life: no health or their Mind isn’t peaceful
- Money can make the rich become to unkind person
· The poor:
- Don’t have a lot of money but have good health
- When they have peace of mind they can to everything.
- The poor become the rich isn’t impossible
* Paragraph 2:
Topic sentence: Live with what we want is happy.
Controlling:
- Content with wealth and health we have
- Lead them to be a happy and peaceful life
- Be ourselves to do everything
* Concluding: No thing is impossible. We needn’t mind about rich or poor. Do everything we want will make our life happy.
THINKING ABOUT HAPPY LIFE
Have you ever thought about “How is happy life you want to live”? Many people believe that happy life often linked with wealth. Because, only the rich have plenty of money, the poor are not. But it not true perfectly. In my idea, I think happy life is that you can live with what you want.
First, I think about the different between the rich and the poor .It’s said that: only the rich have a happy life, the poor are not. It isn’t true because there are many rich people who are not happy with their life. They may have no healthy or their mind is not peaceful. Moreover, money can make the rich become unkind person. Because, when they have a lot of money, they always want to have more and more. The millionaire doesn’t think his wealth is sufficient. It’s very hard for them to stop their desire to earn more money. Beside that, some rich people are always worried about their health. They have to pay a great deal of money for hospital and drug to take care their health. But they’re not only hasn’t good health but also get more anxious about dead. Many students were born and grow up in rich family but they aren’t feeling happy because of dependence. On the contrary, the poor also can live in a happy life, that’s possible. They weren’t born in rich family, they don’t have a lot of money, but if they have good health, have peace of mind and they try to work to earn more money for their life, the poor become the rich isn’t impossible.
Thus, in my mind, if we can live with what we want_ it’s happy. That’s mean: we must content with wealth and health we have, and then pay attention to lead it to be a happy and peaceful life. Do everything what you want such as: read book to widen knowledge, find out new things that we want to discover….. Sometimes, the ideas of many other people around us may make us lose balance, lose way in our mind. Therefore, one of the most important things is: we must be ourselves to do everything.
No one has a happy life naturally, it depend on one’s mind. When we realize what we want to do and how to make them become a peaceful life, it’s wonderful to make our happy life. No thing is impossible.
INTRODUCTION (2ms)
ReplyDelete- Background, hook 1
- Thesis statement 1
BODY (4.5ms)
- Good ideas 2
- Coherence, unity, development 1
- Language: Grammar, vocabulary (1)
CONCLUSION (2ms)
- Summarize (1)
- Lesson, suggestions (1)
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